Observation 3 - Benji

An effective argument requires a good observation, analysis, and structure. While revising my paper I added more detail to the analysis. I looked more in depth at the word choice, color, and music that was used in the infomercial that I analyzed. To improve the analysis of the paper I talked more about the five cannons of rhetoric. By doing this I was able to lengthen my paper, add more analysis, and include more rhetorical wording. To improve the structure of my paper I revised the introduction and conclusion. These are the two most important parts of a paper because they are the most closely read. I added more detail to my introduction and made the thesis sentence flow more smoothly. I also made sure to sum up the answeres to all of the questions in my paper in the conclusion. Another point of concern was citation. I made sure to cite all of the sources that I used in the paper, including the infomercial and the text book including the five cannons of rhetoric.